I am learning to use more description and interesting words so the people who are reading it can understand it well.
When you are reading my writing, you can help me by telling me the bits that are really descriptive and interesting for you. Thanks.
"Johnny I think we are at the sand dunes and it has big sand dunes and we can slide down them. I am so excited. Are you?""Yes this is going to be so cool." "Mummy, me and Johnny are going to go up the sand dunes.""Okay.""Come on Johnny. Let's go up the sand cliff and slide down it."Wweeeeee!
"That was fun. Daddy, can we go up the big big sand hill?" "Come on slow poke. I am it the top. It is like I am Bear Grills in the desert and I am trying to survive in the wild.
"Johnny you are still not up."
"Finally you are up Johnny! I am going to slide down on my back."
The sand felt like spiders crawling down your back .
